comments from class on the thing

add some kind of a beginning

we need to find a character (like a real-life one, for example a 40 year old man, they don’t need to be connected, we just need to have a character we can become)

pauses and reactions

I NEED TO ADD MORE PAUSES

There needs to be a catalyst that starts the first argument

the character needs to be more believable

need to add more lines

we need to organise some thing

we need to intwine our original (get it from Lulu)

thought - imagine that am on a life raft, can’t go anywhere but need to keep it balanced